Here we are for another #TankaTuesday poetry challenge! Bought to us by Colleen Chesebro, this week it’s a Theme prompt selected this week by Harmony
This month’s theme is: “The Longest Day”
I chose to write a Diatelle but with a cheat.
The Diatelle is a fun, syllable counting form like the etheree with a twist. The syllable structure of the diatelle is as follows: 1/2/3/4/6/8/10/12/10/8/6/4/3/2/1, but unlike an ethere, has a set rhyme pattern of abbcbccaccbcbba. This poetry form may be written on any subject matter and looks best center aligned in a diamond shape.
My cheat was I wrote in the alloted syllables per line but I wrote free verse… Sometimes rules need bending.
The longest day.
She Rises Too early For me flashing Throwing her glory round Like a cloak of many colours Gold, red and pink she blinds me with her light Her warmth already fierce yet she will run the course. By noon she has all but the mad beaten. As afternoon spreads out she bakes us . Languid we hide in shade Evening she Wains, colours And heat Fade.
Female, wife, full time mother and Grandmother. I am not as happy go lucky as I used to be but I am still bubbling along on simmer! I have three handsome sons all grown and flown.The youngest married with a beautiful wife and two sons of his own. Eleven years ago I was working, running a home, driving and socializing then bang in a split second all that was gone. I had an accident at home. I broke my back, not for the first time, I had broken it 10 years previously as well. Unfortunately this time I had broken it really badly and it was truly messed up so I had to have two operations. I was told before each operation that the outcome could mean I spend the rest of my life in a wheelchair. Still as some guy once wrote "I am still standing " yes "better than I ever was " not quite but with the help of a walking stick and as long as I do not stand or sit in one position for too long, I am still standing! Update I no longer use the walking stick . I had lots of friends before the accident but when things like this happen, you loose most of them. Their lives move on and mine stood still and so they left me behind ...I know that is just the way life is but it hurt and always will. Then I looked around and saw those who were still there for me, these friends are the roses in my garden they need to be tended well. They are the diamonds in the dust, I will of been married 50yrs plus this year . Pain and boredom are my enemies now, I have to find different ways to approach life, use my pain befriend it almost...yer right , well that is what they tell me at the pain clinic ROFLMAO ...... if only I could! I have found an outlet for my fears, frustrations and night terrors . I have started writing poetry if that name can be applied to my writing. I hope I do not come over as a moaning winger. I hope I am past all that. I also hope that you might see how the poetry is moving from very dark through the grey and
hopefully in to light ??
I need to update this a little here. I have worked very hard over the years since my accident, I go to the gym regularly, I have a Pilates class and a core class once a week . The guys at the gym and my Pilates teacher cajoled, teased, bullied and encouraged me to abandon my walking stick! :) My back is no longer straight it is C shaped because of the injury and I have lost two and a half inches in height but my Pilates and Core teachers have helped me to stand up as straight and as strongly as possible. Pain and depression are still hanging on my arm but I have weapons to use against them and if I say so myself I cope well.
I have made lots of new friends, real diamonds. I am also very grateful for all the support and help I have encountered here on Wordpress. Hugs and welcome to everyone who visits.
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46 thoughts on “#TANKATUESDAY Weekly #POETRY CHALLENGE NO. 282, 7/26/22, #THEMEPROMPT”
The timeline of a sunny day. Well done, even if it brings back memories of baking in 99 degree heat.
Yes indeed Dan it’s 20c cooler here today than it was last week when it was more than 40c !! Enjoy your day 💜
Beautiful, Sis 💛🙏🏼
Thank you Sis how’s your week going 😊
Finally finished, Sis!!!
Oh, Willow, this is wonderful! I love this. Brilliantly done 💕🙂
Thank you so much 💜💞
Wait, is there supposed to be a rhyming scheme ?
There is but as I explained I cheated and just did the syllables 💜💜💚
I know you said you cheated, but I guess I overlooked how you cheated. I will have try this without cheating
Yes do it’s a lovely format I was just too tired to 💜💜
This is a wonderful poem, Willow.
Thank you Robbie 💜
Very well done, Willow! ❤
Thank you Miriam 🙂🙂
Love this one. Throwing her glory around—fantastic
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Thank you she’s very colourful 🙂💜
Gold, red and pink she blinds me with her light. Love it! Nice one, Willow. ❤ x
Thank you so much Marje I put my heart in this one 💜
It shows, Willow. ❤
Thank you 💜
I adore your cheat!! A beautiful one, my friend. 🧡🧡
Thank you, we have had our longest day all too soon we head for Autumn 💜
Yes, indeed. Ah well, each season has its pros and cons, eh? 🧡
Yes that’s so true 💜💜
The form fit your imagery and the theme so well!
Thank you though I should of used the rhyming scheme. I am grateful you read and commented. 💜
That’s okay– you put your own spin on it!
A real feeling of summer and the Longest Day here!
Thank you Margaret 💜
Oh, very good, Willow. I like that used the imagery of the sun baking us! It’s truly becoming a problem all around the world. Climate change is indeed, very real. ☀️
Yes indeed it is and none of us can escape the fact!
I love this and it done in free verse 🙂
Thank you D.L. yes I cheated but I think it works. 🤔💜
That was beautiful, Willow! “Throwing her glory round”…. Love it! 🙂
Thank you, Sunrise she is such a show off💜
Impressive diatelle. It’s a challenging form. Beautiful too.
Thank you I did enjoy working on it 💜💜
What a lovely metaphor! I like the love-hate relationship with “she.” 😊
Yes mother Nature , Gaia is a formidable partner 💜💜🌹🌹
Beautiful, Willow. Well-crafted and great metaphor! 🌞
Thank you Gwen 💜