Sin and Retribution.

A little bit of fun below. I wrote a Nonet for Colleen Chesebro‘s Weekly Tuesday Tanka, and my very talented friend Jane Doherty wrote me a really smart reply in my comments.

I think it works well as a collaborative poem.

Image from Pixabay

Sin . willowdot21

When it all started there were just two

All sparkly, wonderful and new.

They had eyes for eachother

Such joys to discover

Snake then wriggled in

Try this apple

Itโ€™s good, she

Ate, too

Late.

Retribution. Jane Dougherty

Too late.

And so it came to pass

Eve was the one got the brains

her punishment

to be the slave of the

ditherer

the unimaginative

yes man

content in his ignorance.

19 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jane Dougherty
    Jun 11, 2019 @ 14:58:29

    Time to get our own back, I think ๐Ÿ™‚

    Reply

  2. larry trasciatti
    Jun 11, 2019 @ 15:52:24

    hey I disagree completely

    Reply

  3. Ritu
    Jun 11, 2019 @ 17:25:55

    Look at you collaborating!

    Reply

  4. Audrey Dawn - Oldest Daughter Redheaded Sister
    Jun 11, 2019 @ 19:03:02

    I adore this image

    Reply

  5. Colleen Chesebro
    Jun 11, 2019 @ 21:14:19

    LOL! This is so good together! You girls make me happy that you are having fun writing poetry! โค

    Reply

  6. robertawrites235681907
    Jun 12, 2019 @ 03:08:03

    Just brilliant, ladies. I loved it.

    Reply

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