This week for Colleen’s weekly poetry challenge we have the words Dance and Command. The twist is we have to use synonyms.
First I did a Senryu about relationship.
Like a doll she twirls
He thinks it’s to his orders
No, she pulls his strings
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And then a Haiku.
Snowdrops, Crocuses
Perform annual ballet
As young Spring decrees.
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Finally a Tanka.
A fatal tango
I trip the light fantastic
My inner voice screams no
I do his bidding blindly
Yet still I get it all wrong.
Apr 10, 2018 @ 14:51:26
You knocked that right out the ballpark sis!
Apr 10, 2018 @ 14:55:18
Thank you Sis 💜 I value your words and friendship. 💜💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 15:56:24
😍
Apr 10, 2018 @ 14:56:51
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Apr 10, 2018 @ 15:02:51
Willow, you’ve outdone yourself. Well done! ❤
Apr 10, 2018 @ 15:11:42
Thank you Colleen, the prompt spoke to me.💜💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 15:18:28
I love dancing with the fairies and I would love Spring if it would only pay us a visit! 💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 17:05:04
I’m patiently waiting too, Willow. ❤
Apr 10, 2018 @ 17:49:11
I think we all are 💜😱
Apr 10, 2018 @ 17:55:08
I really like all three. The haiku is my favorite 🙂 I was wondering if an “s” got away in the Senryu – to my eyes it seems it fell off of “pulls” (leaving “pull”) and landed on “doll” (making it “dolls”). Or am I misreading it?
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:03:43
OMG I am having a day of mistakes I shall have to go and see I shall be right back 💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:06:00
You were totally right, I don’t know how that happened, I have fixed it now 💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:06:45
Those pesky “s”s just have a habit of getting away from you on occasion 😉
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:20:05
They certainly have, thanks for letting me know my S’s were on the loose! 😊💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:06:10
Thank you 💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:07:10
You are welcome. 🙂
Apr 10, 2018 @ 18:20:23
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Apr 10, 2018 @ 19:02:13
Nicely done. A fatal tango – oh my. I like to dance but I think I’ll pass on that step.
Apr 10, 2018 @ 20:14:32
Yes it a killer 😱💜
Apr 10, 2018 @ 19:03:04
Wow, all fantastic Willow. 🙂
Apr 10, 2018 @ 20:13:46
Thank you Marje 💜😊
Apr 11, 2018 @ 03:26:16
I really love all of these, Willow!
🌸❤️💓
Apr 11, 2018 @ 05:53:36
Thank you Betty I put my soul in these.💞💜
Apr 11, 2018 @ 19:34:25
I do too….our poems come from authentic places. 💓💓💓
Apr 11, 2018 @ 20:08:30
I know you do , 💜💜💜
Apr 11, 2018 @ 20:19:58
💕🌸💕💖 How are things going, Willow? Still raining? We’re finally catching a few sunbreaks here but it’s chilly out…
Apr 11, 2018 @ 21:20:07
It didn’t rain today but it’s cold here too. I think Spring has deserted us completely!💜💜💜🤣
Apr 11, 2018 @ 14:13:42
All of them are awesome! I love the last one
Apr 11, 2018 @ 15:10:57
Thank you Kat , yes the last one is relevant to many women.💜
Apr 11, 2018 @ 19:29:00
yes
Apr 13, 2018 @ 17:48:04
A really lovely trio of poems, Willow.
Apr 13, 2018 @ 18:28:37
Thank you Robbie 💜