Trapped under ice.

Trapped under ice

I’m bleeding,  under ice.

I can’t find the crack

Can’t breath I’m loosing track.


Splitting ice, but I can’t get out

No one hears even though I shout.

Trapped, cracking up loosing all

Can’t breath as I slip and fall.

8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Eric Alagan
    Jul 11, 2013 @ 22:51:11

    That is scary – to be trapped under a sheet of ice


    • willowdot21
      Jul 12, 2013 @ 12:31:22

      That scares me too one fear I have had all my life. But I was using it as a metaphor, for stress and fear! Yet I believe in the reader finding what they want from a poem!! xx


  2. WordsFallFromMyEyes
    Jul 13, 2013 @ 00:31:48

    Chilling, this one. Sounds like a nightmare, with your hands seeking seeking to find that crack in the ice before your last breath passes.

    Well expressed Willow, though chilling.


    • willowdot21
      Jul 13, 2013 @ 05:03:51

      ” chilling.” great adjective for the poem, don’t you think!! Yes it is a long held fear of mine. I also wrote it as a metaphor for people paralyzed by fear trapped by emotions but I don’t care how people read it, interpret it as long as they are touched by it!! Hugs again.xx


    Jul 13, 2013 @ 01:16:20

    I read this as a spiritual frozen state~ the fear is always spiritual in my estimation ~ I love your heart!


  4. bearspawprint
    Jul 15, 2013 @ 00:14:20

    Melt that damned ice with a hot mad anger …. er, unless that fear is protecting you. but if it is killing you melt it .—- By the by, nicely written.


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