NaPoWriMo Day 8 Sorrows

DAY 8 NaPoWriMo : Today’s prompt is write a poem in the English style of an ottava rima which is an eight-line stanza of iambic pentameter. I have attempted two Stanzas. 

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Sorrows

I sought to drive  my sorrows out  but they did not wish to go.

They refused point blank to leave me even though I begged them so.

I thought I may be able to drown them in whisky or in gin.

I tried very hard but those blighters had actually learnt to swim.

I wished them goodnight and  went up to bed.

Sadly when I tried to sleep they had migrated and were waiting in my head!

I sit and and shake my fists and bury my head in my hands

I really need a rest but my sorrows have other plans .

I run out the house and into the woods.

But the sorrows can out run me and so that is no good.

Stopping and turning as I flee, I see

those damn miserable sorrows are still after me.

I have had enough, if I just sit down,

these sorrows are just screwing me around.

I am afraid awake and terrified  asleep,

I fear these sorrow are after my mind for keeps.

21 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. philosophermouseofthehedge
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 17:21:50

    Impressive: not only achieving the designated form, but thought and content, too. Poetry is hard – well done. (Cat sent me over)

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  2. Angela
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 17:50:57

    I salute you, Willow, for following the prompts! I’m participating, but writing my poems as they arrive :-). Perhaps next year I’ll be brave enough to have a go at the prompts. Great poem 🙂

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  3. willowdot21
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 17:55:36

    Thank you Angela , I really appreciate you taking the time to read my poems! I have enjoyed the prompts so much so far I do hope I can keep it up!!

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  4. WordsFallFromMyEyes
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 19:59:03

    You’re doing awesomely, Willow. It’s wonderful to see 🙂

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  5. williamricci
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 21:26:30

    Great images in this poem, and it flows nicely.

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  6. penpusherpen
    Apr 09, 2013 @ 08:45:20

    those pesky sorrows, Sweet Willow, … once they have hold they niggle away…. but you gave ’em a trouncing, twice this day…… You win by a mile my friend with your poetry, and they faded to nothing …. xPenx

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    • willowdot21
      Apr 09, 2013 @ 09:37:47

      Yes Pen we never never give up! I shall sort them out! Perhaps our dear green and scaly friend could help to smoke them out!I am glad you like the poem!

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      • penpusherpen
        Apr 09, 2013 @ 12:55:24

        Fyrespike to the rescue, Sweet Willow, can you see the smoke? (I think he’s changed baccy brands,,, phewwww!!..) . AND I must do an update soon, on his story…. I keep promising myself time and time again but.. sheesh!! time… takes no flipping notice… 🙂 xPenx..

    • willowdot21
      Apr 09, 2013 @ 17:50:31

      I see him steaming this way!! and yes Tempus fugit!

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  7. jessicanix
    Apr 09, 2013 @ 10:48:41

    I vote we burn them, evil little buggers. Good job on following the prompt, I was only able to do this one halfway.

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  8. Monica
    Apr 09, 2013 @ 14:18:47

    Hello Willow, Why did I take so long to find you? Really like this poem and your “about me” text on your gravatar page. Looking forward to reading lots more.

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    • willowdot21
      Apr 09, 2013 @ 17:46:15

      Hi Monica , I don’t why but I have not met you either so I shall be over later asap to met you properly. Welcome , welcome make yourself at home!! 😉 xx

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  9. kelihasablog
    Apr 10, 2013 @ 00:18:08

    Really, Really well done! I love it! The picture is fantastic too… (I haven’t forgotten I owe you an award, it’s coming… 😀 )

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  10. I HAVE A VOICE
    Apr 10, 2013 @ 01:21:49

    wonderful ! reminds me of the song “Good morning Heartaches” A wonderful poem!

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