Cinquain NaPoWriMo

DAY5  OF NaPoWrim0  Is  a cinquain is a poem that employs stanzas with five lines.

Well here we go three little  cinquain they are not too happy but we cannot be be upbeat all the time can we?

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Tablets

 

Tablets

lozenge shaped

white and round

they lift me up

smashed.

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Tired

 

Tired

drooping low

muscles aching pain

all over me so

tired.

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Depression

 

Depression

sinking falling

dragging me down

loosing my senses crawling

evil, cruel depression.

6 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. hollyannegetspoetic
    Apr 05, 2013 @ 22:10:11

    I like the abstract simplicity of these Willow – you’ve got a kind of unraveling thing going on in the rhythm which works with the subject matter. Yes, I do like.

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    • willowdot21
      Apr 06, 2013 @ 07:13:37

      Thanks Holly, I do love to try new things and I can’t resist a challenge! I really appreciate what you have said because I am such a fan of your work and if don’t always praise it , it is because I don’t want you to think “OMG it’s that weirdo again” 😉 seriously though I did like these and I tried to keep them simple and in rhythm and to the point.

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  2. penpusherpen
    Apr 06, 2013 @ 17:35:07

    definitely to the point, Sweet Willow, ..describing so well the downward spiralling hold depression has on us… At one time I was held totally in it’s thrall, and the ‘dark cloud’ as I name it sometimes returns without warning, ’tis a difficult emotion to explain but you have managed it… … warm hugs to you my friend. xPenx

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    • willowdot21
      Apr 06, 2013 @ 17:47:09

      Thank you Pen, I call it the black dog and so often he is just lurking in the shadows! We just need to keep an out for them Pen we can keep the cloud and the black dog at bay!!

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  3. WordsFallFromMyEyes
    Apr 08, 2013 @ 20:01:35

    I like ‘they lift me up smashed’ – Really great stuff, Willow.

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