Can You

NaPoWriMo

The prompt write a poem that has the same first line as another poem.  The poem I chose is ” When, Like a Running Grave ” by Dylan Thomas

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Can You

When, like a running grave, time tracks you down,

Do you  accept the challenge will you  run with the torch.

Will you  escape along the streets and the avenues of this town.

Waving like a victor garlanded and smiling to each sweetheart on her front porch.

Will you out run the pain , the disappointment and the tick of time.

Can  you ascend to heights not yet dreamed off.

Can you run faster than the wind and destroy the ordinary line.

Yet not give in to the drudgery of  life and love.

Can you, can you or will time you entrap

Then bury you with toil under deaths relentless track.

 

8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Eric Alagan
    Apr 02, 2013 @ 00:46:41

    Love the verse and image.

    There is something about the wolf and the girl – its not the first time I felt this way.

    Reply

    • willowdot21
      Apr 02, 2013 @ 08:07:16

      Thank you Eric I feel akin to the wolf and the raven/ crow though if I met a wolf I doubt he wold take to me except for his lunch!! Though it is a dream of mind and I think many of us share this dream and of course the old enemy time is always chasing us. We all need to throw off some of our safe modern ties and see the world.

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  2. Patrick pattachou2009
    Apr 02, 2013 @ 00:56:11

    Hello
    Poem in the lineage of the accursed poets,
    I’m a fan of Sthéphane Mallarmé among other.
    Bravo for this text…best regards Patrick

    Reply

  3. kelihasablog
    Apr 02, 2013 @ 04:36:44

    Love that… the words touch so many places in my heart… Well done! No, beautifully done!. Love the picture too! 😀

    Reply

  4. Shakti Ghosal
    Apr 02, 2013 @ 06:38:40

    Can I?

    Sure I can but what is it that holds me from trying? Is it the comfort of my known? Is it the perception of what others would think and say? Is it our own inner insecurities of failure? Is it a mix of all this?

    So what could we do to go forward?

    Loved the verse!

    Shakti

    Reply

    • willowdot21
      Apr 02, 2013 @ 08:00:57

      Hi Shakti you have voiced what i think we all think! Sadly I think we ave all become too too “safe” in our modern world full of gadgets and luxuries. We need to cast off what we think is important and run with the wolf and the crow. … But can you? can I ? /// I am so pleased you like the verse.

      Reply

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