More food for thought Zumpoems , I preferred the second method I found it much easier!
2 words Still life
3 words A still life
still life
6 words A beautiful still life so life like
12 words It was a beautiful still life so life like and vivid in colour
24 words There it was hidden in a dark dusty corner , it was a beautiful still life so life like and startlingly vivid in it’s colour
48 words I approached the house soaked by the heavy rain as I did, knocking the door I received no answer so I went in from the thunderstorm there it was hidden in a dark dusty corner , it was a beautiful still life so life like and startlingly vivid in it’s colour
96 words As I approached the old run down house soaked through to the skin by the heavy rain as I was knocking on the red door with its old rusty knocker I received no answer I go no reply from ringing the door bell either so I circled the house looking for a way in finding the french windows on the latch I went in from the thunderstorm there it was hidden in a dark dusty corner , it was a beautiful still life so lifelike and startlingly vivid in it’s colour and shades it seemed to
107 words As I approached the old run down house soaked through to the skin by the heavy rain as I was knocking on the red door with its old rusty knocker I received no answer I got no reply from ringing the door bell either so I circled the house looking for a way in then finding the french windows on the latch I went in out from the thunderstorm then I saw it there it was hidden in a dark dusty corner , it was a beautiful still life so lifelike and startlingly vivid in it’s colour and shades it seemed to call out to me
107 words
As I approached the old run down house soaked through to the skin as I was
by the heavy rain I knocked on the red door with its old rusty knocker
I received no answer I got no reply from ringing the door bell either
so I circled the house looking for a way in then finding the french windows on the latch
I went in out from the thunderstorm then I saw it there it was hidden in a dark dusty corner
it was a beautiful still life so lifelike and startlingly vivid in it’s colour and shades
it seemed to call out to me
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2words Half Life
hiding from the light
107 words We live in shadows hiding in doorways shying away from electric light’s glare unhappy in the daylight longing for the night writhing in pain if caught by the suns rays struggling hard to keep out of it’s way digging deep holes is how we spend the day tunnelling this way and that deeper and deeper we go hardly needing our eyes anymore that is why we now call this life we lead half life you on my left and you on my right we use drains now to move around we need to be private afraid to be found this half life to which we’re bound.
Half life
Half life
We live in shadows hiding in doorways shying away
from electric light’s glare unhappy in the daylight
longing for the night
writhing in pain if caught by the suns rays
struggling hard to keep out of it’s way
digging deep holes is how we spend the day
tunnelling this way and that deeper and deeper we go hardly
needing our eyes anymore that is why we now call this life
we lead half life you on my left and you on my right
we use drains now to move around
we need to be private afraid to be found
this half life to which we’re bound.
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Nov 02, 2011 @ 17:08:59
Very creative.
Nov 02, 2011 @ 17:14:04
Thank you will you be having a go?
Nov 02, 2011 @ 19:32:59
I am amazed by your speed and virtuosity. You have produced a really emotional, sensitive poem!
You flirt with a run on sentence (fused sentence) between “we lead half life” and “you on my left” (independent clause) and at the end (“we lead”, “we use”, “we need”) but that is fixed if one sees either a colon or semi-colon there. Have added punctuation below to reflect how I read this:
We live in shadows hiding in doorways, shying away
from electric light’s glare, unhappy in the daylight,
longing for the night,
writhing in pain if caught by the suns rays,
struggling hard to keep out of it’s way,
digging deep holes is how we spend the day,
tunnelling this way and that deeper and deeper we go hardly
needing our eyes anymore that is why we now call this life
we lead half life: you on my left and you on my right;
we use drains now to move around;
we need to be private afraid to be found;
this half life to which we’re bound.
I think this is one of my all-time favorites of yours. Really excellent imagery — nicely understated and appropriate — and really excellent content!
Nov 02, 2011 @ 22:16:24
we need more people to enter the challenge!
Nov 02, 2011 @ 22:09:52
Thank you zumpoems I did like this poem myself , I like the idea of people living a half life hidden away afraid of the light! Thank you again for your praise I just hope I am worthy of it all.
Nov 03, 2011 @ 09:56:44
This is fascinating work. Your poems are beautifully crafted.
I will have to come back to this on a day when my computer is behaving itself – it is being very badly behaved today and have a shot at the challenge. It looks intriguing.
Nov 03, 2011 @ 16:37:58
Yes Jill you really should you would love it, it certainly gets the old grey matter working.
Nov 04, 2011 @ 05:50:50
Very creative without losing the meaning of sense. 🙂
Nov 04, 2011 @ 09:24:42
Thanks Jay, have you thought of entering the challenge ?